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Susan Daniels's avatar

Touching, heart-breaking but well-worth reading.

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Mom2theCorps's avatar

Great story!

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Boris Doyle's avatar

It took me a couple of days.

I normally decide the ending first and reverse engineer it.

But I didnt like the end so changed it mid way through

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jennifer dibley's avatar

Had me on edge the whole time

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Boris Doyle's avatar

I was discussing the end with a friend.

I was trying to figure out how it needed to be ended.

I think his mother making him identify himself between raising his hand was the miracle needed.

I had an idea that maybe Davy wakes up in the same bed.

Then they are questioning him about what happened and then Mr Stagg askes why he raised his arm when he was almost frozen to death.

Davy says. "A woman said i should".

Then Mr. Stagg says, "but there weren't any women in the search party"

Then they all have a good cry

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MeatBeOff's avatar

Why are you subscribed to a doxxing spammer?

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Boris Doyle's avatar

I’ve no idea what you’re talking about

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Larisa Rimerman's avatar

Every story about an abandoned child, especially one so young as six, would touch everybody's heart. The problem with this story is that a six-year-old boy can't tell it. The story is too complicated for a little boy not only to understand, but also to retell what happened to him in his dream or real life. My advice: give the story a different title or change your boy's age. Thank you.

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Boris Doyle's avatar

Abandoned, runaway or just dreaming

He's narrating as he's awake and what he thinks and sees.

Everything is through his eyes.

If this story isn't to your taste, I have others here.

Three Littke Words seems to have a reasonable popular interest. (Usually means of the ten who read it most likely it)

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